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Re: Bits & Pieces: Agatha
Hello! I really liked all the description that you put into this. Very visual. I see what you’re saying, about how it’s hard to write about a character when you’re ...
Apr 14, 2008 -
Re: Sirens' Symphony *Edited 2nd May*
This seems like it would sound very good. Musicals are supposed to be more of telling a story with song, not as much lyrical poetry as regular music. And I ...
Apr 14, 2008 -
Re: The Past
Currently under construction. :D
Apr 14, 2008 -
Re: Preparing for the Time of My Life
Hi! I though this was pretty good. I really enjoyed your voice through the whole thing. It was great, and entertaining. I would suggest a little more setting description. Tell ...
Apr 14, 2008 -
Re: Sorcerer's Academy
Alexey- Alexey hurried into the hall and already most tables were filled with other students. He looked around for his own table, finding it quickly. It was almost empty, except ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: Sorcerer's Academy
Alexey- Alexey felt bad about what he had said to Acelyn, and he thought about it while walking to his room. He hadn’t meant to offend her, but she seemed ...
Apr 4, 2008 -
Re: Sorcerer's Academy
Alexey- Alexey strolled across the lawn, observing other as they greeted each other with smiles, girls were giggling and talking as fast as they could, while boys were laughing and ...
Apr 3, 2008 -
Re: Olivia
Thank you, all. As you can tell, presenting was not the end of the world, no matter how much it felt like it. ;) But this is all very helpful, ...
Apr 2, 2008 -
Re: Olivia
I finally finished writing this for health class, despite how very much I tried to avoid it by floating around YWS (shame on me). But I’m a little nervous about ...
Apr 2, 2008 -
Re: Dragon Rider of DOOM and CHAOS!
Tehehe 'I am secret.' whispered the egg. Startled (as you would be) by being spoken to by a large, blue egg, Mathias drops the egg. 'What are you???' he cried. ...
Apr 1, 2008 -
Re: Sorcerer's Academy
Name: Alexey Crolle Age: 15 Gender: Male Cast: Royal Homeland: Sendra Appearance: Personality: Descending from a Royal Family, Alexey is used to getting his way, and being above others. Though ...
Apr 1, 2008 -
Re: Madness of Love
This was good, I really liked your voice and style. And you have a nicely developed character. One thing bothered me though, "Umm... I don't really know how to put ...
Mar 31, 2008 -
Re: The Coven
Oooo fun! Name: Roxanne Flores Age: 22 Elements: Water and Fire Appearance: Pale skin and milky blond curly hair, light blue eyes. Clothes: Usually deep purple dresses, decorated with black ...
Mar 31, 2008 -
Re: Dragon Bait #4
1. Is the switching view awkward? It's been all Penelope so far, so I fear it seems weird to have someone's else perspective. What do you think? I didn't think ...
Mar 31, 2008 -
Re: The Pits
Astoria- Azael looked about ready to explode. It was frightening to see him so angry, sparks nearly flying from his eyes. Astoria didn’t understand why he was so upset, if ...
Mar 20, 2008
